Marley's obligatory Art thread

Post by **Blastotoise** » Sun Sep 09, 2007 12:39 pm

Well here It is.. It has a digression of the B-word in it. Oh, and i may do some origami later if i can get a camera...

Post by **Josiah** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 6:33 am

I don't have time to give it a full break down but here's a couple of things that need work.

First off, Luigi is hovering in the first three panels and barely on the floor in the fourth. He really should be firmly on the ground the entire time. That's what the ground is there for.

Second: The outlines between your panels could stand to be a bit thicker. Also, they're not all lined up perfectly, which throws things off a bit.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 9:43 pm

Well, heres number 2. Its entitled "You heard Luigi, they did NOTHING" Mild adult themes.

Post by **Stevenson** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 9:56 pm

Well, it's in need of some serious grammar/punctuation revision, but I'm not here to talk about that.

Um, why is luigi auditioning if he's the only one who's appeared on screen thusfar? If anyone should be auditioning, it's Mario. Also also, the lines are still too weird and thin.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 10:06 pm

1) Mario is coming in later.
2) Which lines are you talking about? The ones that connect the boxes to the people?
3) Some things will be answered in the next comic.

Post by **Josiah** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 6:35 am

Well, Lugi certainly looks like he's on the ground now and the thicker lines between the panels are good although it still looks like they're not entirely straight in a couple of spots. As far as the script goes, aside from the grammar/punctuation stuff, I'm not a big fan of that style of humor. Some people like it though.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 4:06 pm

Wow, when i look at it through the link, the quality is horrible... one of the words looks like "weecomic..." and theres supposed to be a period after that same sentence..... Should i change the format? It's PNG right now...

Post by **Silver** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 4:23 pm

Blastotoise wrote:Wow, when i look at it through the link, the quality is horrible... one of the words looks like "weecomic..." and theres supposed to be a period after that same sentence..... Should i change the format? It's PNG right now...

The issue is the size of the file, not the type... If you were to make the pages a little smaller it shouldn't do that.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 4:26 pm

So just make the comic smaller? That may be kinda hard...

Oh, and the borders are straight. Thats what the little white things all around the border are for.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 9:25 pm

Well, heres issue 3! It's entitled "Happy now?" Well any way, the entire comic needs a name, so im open to suggestions. And anyway, all you have to do is click on the image and it will zoom in a bit. I found out it looks better that way.

Post by **Stevenson** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 9:44 pm

....eeryone. Seriously. I edit comics for a dyslexic, and she's a MUCH better speller than you are.

(now, if that sounded like an insult to Shauni, it wasn't-she's done much to overcome dyslexia, and should be extremely proud of herself, really.)

Besides that-I, uh, really haven't gotten ANY of the jokes so far.

Well, that's a lie. I've gotten them, I just really didn't like them. So, sorry.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Tue Sep 11, 2007 9:55 pm

Yeah, i was just coming to tell everyone that i had made an error but.... you got here before i did. I just hope at least one person laughs at my jokes... Then the "work" will be worth it.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Wed Sep 12, 2007 7:44 pm

Well, heres number 4! "Happy Birthday Silver!!!" Just something i did for his B-day.
It's the thought that counts, Right?

(REMEMBER TO ZOOM IN!!!!)

Post by **Josiah** » Wed Sep 12, 2007 9:35 pm

FYI: Not everyone needs to zoom in. It's just that browsers like IE (and probably Firefox too) will automatically shrink some images to better fit your screen. Clicking on them displays the image at its original size. However, if your monitor is big enough (and/or has a high enough resolution) the image will be displayed at full size right away and there's no need to click.

What I meant about the outlines is, if you look at the vertical line that runs between the panels, at the spots where the walls meet the floor, it looks like it gets shifted over a pixel or two.

For the spelling, if you have Microsoft Word I'd recommend typing up your dialogue in there, spell checking it, and then pasting it into Paint (since Paint doesn't have a spell check). Now that won't help with some of the grammar stuff but it should catch most spelling errors and typos.

Post by **Blastotoise** » Wed Sep 12, 2007 10:13 pm

WHAT SPELLING ERRORS AND OR TYPOS????? I can't find them....well anyway..i think silver blob will be a recurring character until i kill him off... It's only supposed to actually represent sliver on this issue of the comic.