My Poems

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Blue Fire Cyndaquil
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My Poems

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Poem 1: The Everlasting Dilemna

To travel or to stay at home,
To stay inside or try to roam,
To continue my endless void,
While human contact I avoid,
Or should I risk my fragile pride,
Just so that a friend I may find,
And then my pride they'll try to take,
If they do turn out to be fake,
So then should I just take the risk,
Or great times instead I will miss.

The rhymes aren't perfect, I know.

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That's really good ^^ I like it, and that's something considering I'm not into stuff like that, the only flaw I could tell was that you don't need the 'do' nor the 'out' in the 8th line and it still makes sense.
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It was to keep the rhythm. It wouldn't sound as good without do and out.
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