Hey all, I'm taking Writer's Craft this semester and for my final project I plan on turning in a story that's been sitting on the shelf for about ... 4 months now. I'm going to put up the prologue now, maybe the rest later depending on how many people actually post here and I sincerely beg of all you who read this post...if you see Anything you think could sound better another way, or anything like that, please speak up! I want to get as good a mark as possible! By the way, it is somewhat violent sometimes, I hope nobody minds!
*Edit: everything in bold is something I fixed up.*
Dreamscape 1 – Prologue
The beast crashed into the wall as Alex turned around a corner, barely dodging its razor sharp claws. With a bellow of fury, the beast turned around the corner and charged straight at Alex. The beast gained very quickly on Alex, when he had the sudden urge to turn around. When he did, he noticed four lines on his arm; four large gashes in the shape of a symbol that Alex didn’t recognize and weren’t there a moment ago. But instead of feeling pain, seeing the marks brought a feeling of relief to Alex. The beast wasabout to pounce on him and tear him to shreds when a drop of some foul liquid fell on its head. Startled, the beast stopped and touched the drop, bringing the finger toward its face to see what fell on it. Looking at it closer, Alex managed to see the drop for a moment when it shone in a ray of light. The liquid was blacker than the midnight sky and a strange emotion overcame Alex. He knew seeing a drop of some strange, dark liquid should probably freak him out, or at least surprise him, but it’s as if he was expecting it. Mere moments later, he felt something come towards him and the beast from above. He looked up and saw a rip in the sky itself, bleeding the foul black liquid on the ground. Out from the hole came an inhuman arm, yet somehow Alex recognized it. The arm reached out and grabbed the beast, crushing its head between its wet fingers. With the beasts head crushed to a pulp in this newcomer’s hand, Alex was too stunned to move. He managed to look up at the tear as the arm moved back inside. All of a sudden, the black liquid flew back up into the air and pulled itself into the tear. As the stuff went in, the tear drew into itself, until all Alex could see [/b]was[/b] a pair of glowing eyes that he recognized, yet had never seen before. The tear closed, and --
_________________   Rania - Female; Type: Water, Grass; Abilities: Torrent, Overgrow; Attacks: Tackle, Curse, Razor Leaf, Bubble W/L = 5/0  Karst - Male; Type: Normal; Abilities: Keen Eye, Guts; Attacks: Tail Whip, Scratch, Defense Curl W/L = 2/0
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