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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 8:09 pm 
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;-) I'm doing well,oh our techer ran over a tree at school while we where outside gardening.


;-) Thanks White Samira i hope it turns out well.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 8:39 pm 
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What was she driving when she ran the tree over? Was the tree messed up? Was the car damaged? IS your teacher ok?

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 6:21 am 
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;-) Yeah shes o-k she was driveing a bulldozer and we where outside takeing care of the garden,she was bring us mulch to spread around the flowers and shes was watching us to make sure she diden't run over us and she backed up right over the poor little tree. She diden't even notice and whent back to the other side of the school to get more mulch. Then my friend Travis that was out there with me looked behide us and said "Dude she just ran over that tree." I said "WHAT!?!?!" And when i looked back there it was knocked over and everything we ran over there and looked at it and,it had been up rooted and lost a branch but other then that it was o-k. ;-) When she got back over and climed out of the bulldozer we both looked up at her and at the same time said "Tree Killer." We where just kidding because we knew the tree was o-k. ;-) SO she put it back up and put mulch around it and it was fine. She said she would give me and Travis each a pop if we diden't tell anyone,but then she told the princeabul and he said it was o-k because there diden't look like there was to much danmage. ;-) And we still get out pop I'm so happy.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 8:22 pm 
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;-) mmm... you're always cute, aren't you?

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 9:03 pm 
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There is WAY too much wrong here, so I'm just going to copy-paste and fix. Changes in bold. Oh, and smileys are removed. They are pointless mid-paragraph.

'Yeah she's ok. She was driving a bulldozer, and we were outside taking care of the garden. She was bringing us mulch to spread around the flowers, and she was watching us to make sure she didn't run us over, but she backed up right over the poor little tree. She didn't even notice and went back to the other side of the school to get more mulch. My friend Travis then, who was out there with me, looked behide us and said, "Dude she just ran over that tree." I then said "WHAT!?!?!" And when I looked back, there it was knocked over and everything. We ran over there and looked at it, and it had been uprooted and lost a branch, but other than that it was ok. When she got back over and climed out of the bulldozer we both looked up at her and at the same time said "Tree Killer." We were just kidding because we knew the tree was ok. So she put it back up, and put mulch around it so it was fine. She said she would give me and Travis each a pop if we didn't tell anyone, but then she told the principal and he said it was ok because there didn't look like there was too much damage. And we still get our pop (could either be:), so I'm happy. (Or:). I'm so happy.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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;-) But I injoy useing smileing faces,and not useing them would be changeing the person I am. And that would be something I'm not. Also even though my spelling may not be the best,people still know what I'm saying and thus I don't see the point on changeing every little thing in my paragrah when it was only ment for one person to read and it seems to not bother them. That is all.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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Eclectric wrote:
;-) mmm... you're always cute, aren't you?



(blushes) :blush: Well my teacher is the one that ran over the tree. I diden't do anything cute,not that running over trees are cute or anything just.....I'm confused.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 2:36 am 
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*^_^*kako wrote:
Eclectric wrote:
;-) mmm... you're always cute, aren't you?



(blushes) :blush: Well my teacher is the one that ran over the tree. I diden't do anything cute,not that running over trees are cute or anything just.....I'm confused.

The "tree killer" thing sounded cute and silly.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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Alright, guys, that's enough.

This is the writing section, keep the stories and lovey-dovey to PM, please.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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Is part 2 coming soon?

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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;-) I diden't know that someone was whaiting for part two to come out,I'll post it next time I get online.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
PostPosted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 3:25 am 
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luquos I apperaite your comments,but sense this is part of the writeing section I would like to point out that writers block is a constant worry among writers. And the only way to get around such a block is to be inspired,I understand you only had good intenshions in mind however you don't understand that talking on here is my writeing. Eveyone inspires me in diffrent ways,and diffrent people can do that as well,by the way they talk and act. So to ask not to talk on this fourm is not only unheard of but is also would mean to cut out the bigest part of the writeing fourm. Also finely this is my story and no one is forced to read it,I know commenting evey second would be stupid and also agent the rules but I don't,I comment only to reply to other people and I try to do it all in one post.Its not very lady like to be rude and criticize a persons writeing that they love very much. Thank you for takeing the time to read this if you do and I hope you too can understand what it is to be a writer. ;-) Oh one more thing,I do whant to apologize for my writeing I do know I make spelling mistakes and I will contenue to try to do better.


White_Samurai: ;-) Sorry I haven't gotton around to adding more yet.

Eclectric:awwwwww.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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luquos wrote:
Alright, guys, that's enough.

This is the writing section, keep the stories and lovey-dovey to PM, please.


Consider yourself lucky that Kako said something and not I... you are so very blessed that Kako is so nice and that there's not a mean bone in her. I take great offense to what you've said, but I will not turn a blind eye to Kako's courteous words, and I do not wish to start a spat over one person's hasty and misguided words. I offer you my forgiveness, for I have no intention for Kako's attempts to prevent any disputes be wasted.
Oh, and not to mention this is Kako's thread, dedicated to something she wrote and loves. Are you a writer? If so you'd understand that every writer has their own creative method. Hers is light-hearted and it helps to have ordinary and pleasant conversation blended into the talk about writing. I know this. Your cold words are accusatory, inflammatory, misguided, misunderstanding, and have no place in this thread or this forum. You suggest in those words that there is "lovey dovey" but in reality it's simply conversation of the ordinary sort. You have created a problem where there was none. This sort of negative energy is not what pebbleversion is for. Looks at the mess it's made. Kako and I are willing to make peace here and solve the problem before one starts. I hope you can apologize and admit that those words were uncalled for and should not be associated with your character or have negative impact on people's respect for you. If you do not see that those words are misplaced and wrong, then you must see them as completely justified, and the act of lashing out at two forum members for no adequate reason is also perfectly fine. That is why you should apologize. I hope my words make sense to you.

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 Post subject: Re: Flying People
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Calm down guys. You both have a point.

Luquos is right that you've tended to get way off topic here.
But, as Electric pointed out, this is kako's thread.

Since it is kako's writing thread, I'll allow her to let it drift off topic if she wants it to. But I need to say that, Electric, Kako, you take things way too seriously.

First off, Luqous wasn't being mean or rude with the off topic comment. Pointing out that someone is off topic is a normal practice on most forums. You may recall that I said something similar when your flirting started to take over some other threads. As I said, since this is Kako's thread I'll allow it, but it's technically still off-topic so don't get mad at Luquos for pointing that out. Many people (quite possibly most) wouldn't want unrelated conversations going on in their writing threads, Kako just happens to be an exception. And, now that that's been made clear, the subject can be dropped.

Secondly, I'm a long time writer (over 12 years) and one who has had a few (albiet small) things published, so I'm speaking from experience here. No matter how much you love your writing, it's going to have faults. Be they typos, spelling errors, gramatical problems, or even issues with the story itself. Instead of getting upset when someone points out those faults, you should be repsectful, look over what they say, and, if you determine that they were right about some things, go and fix them. That's the way you improve. When I write a story, I always tell the first few people I give it to to mark any mistakes or confusing parts they come across as they read it. I then review everything they marked, go back, and make changes. If you're a professional writer, you'll have an editor who does much of the same thing. It's quite common for a published piece of writing to go through numerous drafts and revisions before it's released.
While Luqous wasn't overly polite with his corrections, he wasn't rude either and he didn't attack your story or even question your writing style, flow, or any of that, he just pointed out some spelling and grammar issues. And fixing that kind of thing ALWAYS improves a story. Always.

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